Ghost Stories

Bloody Mary Returns

Spooky Montana

A Montana Ghost Story

Retold by S.E. Schlosser

My stepmother was vile.  I guess most kids think that when their father remarries.  But in this case, it was true.  She only married Father because he was rich, and she hated children.  There were three of us – me (Marie), my middle brother Richard and my youngest brother Charles.  We were the price my stepmother Gerta paid for being rich.  And we were all that stood between her and inheriting Father's money when he died.  So she took steps against us. 

     She sent my youngest brother Charles away to boarding school overseas.  It had a good, scholarly reputation, but it also had the reputation for being a hard school that was full of bullies and strict discipline.  Not a place where a delicate child like Charles, who had been sickly as a baby, would thrive.  He was miserable there.  Somehow, Gerta contrived to keep him there for all but the summer holidays, and when he came home the first year he was pale and thin with dark circles under his eyes that looked like bruises.  He cried – he actually cried! – when Father told him he had to go back to the school.  But Father didn’t listen to him.  Gerta thought it would be good for Charles to go there, and so Charles went.  

  I did everything I could – encouraging letters and daily phone calls – until Gerta said it was too expensive and restricted calls to five minutes once a month.   I even got Father to book me a ticket to Europe so I could visit Charles.  Gerta was enraged when she found out.  Her blue eyes went so cold it made chills run up my spine, and her pink mouth thinned into a bitter line that bade ill for me since I had dared to interfere.  Two days before my plane left for Europe, the school called and told us that Charles had climbed up to the tallest tower and flung himself off.  He was dead. 

     Father was shocked, of course, and Gerta was quietly triumphant.  For a few months, Father paid more attention to Richard and myself then he had since our mother died.  But Gerta was beautiful and had winning ways about her that soon drew my Father’s attention away.  And now that one of her hated step-children was dead, she focused on another.  Poor Richard was next. 

     Richard was a sturdy chap who was about to enter high school, and he was really into sports.  He would have thrived at the boarding school that had killed Charles.  So Gerta sent him to an arts school instead.  He hated it, but Gerta had told Father he had “talent”, so there he went.  (You’d think my Father would have learned his lesson with Charles!)  But Richard was a survivor, and he grimly practiced piano and violin when he would rather have played soccer and football.  But Gerta was clever.  She introduced Richard to a couple of high school boys who were everything Richard craved to be – rich, popular, on the football team.  And into drugs.  Gerta made sure Richard had a very large allowance, and kept increasing it as Richard was drawn deeper and deeper under the influence.  Until one day Richard overdosed, and Gerta only had one step-child left.  Me.

     I was sure (sure!) that Gerta knew Richard was doing drugs in his room that day.  She knew he was ill and possibly dying in there.  If she’d “found” him even ten minutes sooner, his life would have been saved.  So said the doctor, and I believed him.  But Father wouldn’t believe me.  He was angry whenever I said anything against Gerta, and told me to hold my tongue.  Still, I knew I was next, and I was sure that Father would not live long after willing his fortune over to his wife.  I decided that if Gerta got too bad, I would run away and live secretly with my aunt in New Jersey until I turned 18.  

     From the moment Richard’s body was found in his room, I forced myself to be a model child.  My homework was done on time, I was polite to Gerta and all her friends, I went on all the family excursions with Gerta and Father – even the dangerous ones like shark-fishing.  You can be sure that I took care to be “sea-sick” indoors and stayed away from the edge of the boat.  Gerta was clever with her tricks.   Everyone thought it was an accident the time we were out shopping and I fell onto the subway in front of an oncoming train.  I managed to roll out of the way on time, but it was way too close for comfort. 

       I had almost decided to run away when my father brought me the sad news that my aunt in New Jersey had died suddenly in her sleep, poisoned by person or persons unknown.  I was appalled. How had Gerta known?  But she had – I could tell from the smirk on her face. 

      I went to my room that night and locked myself in to think.  I could run away, but the money wouldn’t last long.  And I’d need to finish high school or my chances of getting a good job were nil.  Besides, Gerta would still be out there somewhere.  If she could hire someone to poison my only living relative (besides Father), she could hire someone to kill me, whether I was living at home or not. 

      There was only one thing I could think of.  And it was a terrible thing.  A family secret passed down from my Mother’s side for many generations.  It involved a witch named Bloody Mary, who had once tried to kill my many times great grandmother and use the child’s blood to make herself young and beautiful forever.  The witch had been stopped by the child's father (my many times great grandfather) in the nick of time, and the witch had cursed him as she burned at the stake.  Cursed his mirror, and the mirrors of all the men who had condemned her to death at the stake, so that anyone saying her name in front of those mirrors would invoke her vengeful spirit. 

       The story had gotten mixed up over the years, as it was passed down first in their village and then all over the country.  These days, school kids everywhere scared themselves silly chanting Bloody Mary’s name in front of darkened mirrors during sleepover parties, and nothing happened to them.  So no one really believed in the curse.  Of course, no one knew the real story of Bloody Mary.  That was a deep secret handed down by the villagers of long ago.  But I was a direct descendant, and I knew how to summon the witch.  You had to use a mirror owned by someone in the direct blood-line of one of the original families that lived in Bloody Mary’s village.  And the witch's name must be spoken by candlelight a certain number of times in their native tongue.  

       It was an evil thing to do, I knew.  But it was the only way to save my life.  It was either Gerta or me.  If I didn’t fight back, I was dead.  So I took my hard earned money and went out to a specialty store to buy hand-dipped, beeswax candles.  Black ones.  I followed my mother’s directions carefully, placing them at certain intervals around the living room so that they reflected in the huge mirror behind the couch.  Then I lit each one, speaking the spell passed down in my mother’s family.  And I waited.  Father was away on a business trip, and Gerta was out at a party with her latest boyfriend.  She came home late, and scolded me for staying up to study.   Her voice was playful and light – I hated that voice.  It made her sound like she was nice.  But there was also a note of suspicion underlying her words, and she stared hard at the flickering black candles. 

       “Holding a séance, little Marie?” she asked, emphasizing the word little, knowing I hated when she called me that. 

        “I just like working by candlelight,” I said mendaciously, turning a page in my text book. 

        Gerta frowned.  “You know, little Marie, I think it’s time we had a talk,” she said, walking over to the mirror behind the couch and primping her hair. 

        “Yes,” I said softly.  “We should.  You killed my brothers.  And my aunt.  But I won’t let you kill me.”

          Gerta laughed.  “As if you stood a chance against me!” she said, fluffing her long blond hair up behind her shoulders. 

         I spoke the name of Bloody Mary in the native tongue of my ancestors.  Once.  Twice.  Three times.  Inside the mirror, the image of Gerta burst into flames, and another face looked out.  It was the malevolent face of a twisted old crone, ruined with age, and altogether evil.  I ducked behind the chair as Gerta gave a scream of sheer terror, her eyes fixed on the witch.  As I watched from my hiding place, heat burst forth from the mirror, blistering her beautiful alabaster skin.  I could hear the flames roaring as the witch laughed evilly and held out her arms toward my step mother. 

      “Gerta,” crooned Bloody Mary.  “Come to me, Gerta.” 

        And she took my step mother into her arms. 

        Gerta’s terrified scream was suddenly cut off.  The flames disappeared as suddenly as they had come.  When I peeked out from behind the couch, Gerta and Bloody Mary were gone. 

       I called Father at his hotel the next morning to tell him that Gerta hadn’t slept at home.  (Well, it was true!)  He wasn’t pleased.  He called a few of her friends from his hotel room, and quickly discovered she had been carrying on with another man.  With several, if the truth be known.  Father hated infidelity.  He flew home at once to confront Gerta, but she was still missing; presumed run away with one of her flames. 

      Somehow, Father managed to divorce Gerta without ever trying to find her.  And since she had no family in the area except us, everyone accepted the cover story, and no one ever tried to locate her.  Gerta was gone for good.  And Father and I were safe at last. 

You can read more ghost stories in Spooky Campfire Tales and Spooky Montana, by S.E. Schlosser. 

Comments

this story was GREAT! i liked it a lot i liked how he stood up for himself n i liked also were he kills Gerta i love it! its scary too! AAHHHHHH!! =)

that story was great and it was scary too but i still liked it

LOL good story!!!!!

This wasn't scary at all!!!!!!!!!!!

wow so there is the real story greta got killed yay

This story was really good. It was kinda scary.

OMG I LOVED IT AND IT WAS NOT SCARY

Iloved the story.can youmake a second one

This story was like so awesome!It was scary and exciting,too.We loved it.I hated when Gerta killed her two brothers.:(
It had a nice beging and ending.:)peace!

a really scary story and it will be brillant to read on hallwoween night

i didnt read the story but its good!!

Story was good

i liked it a lot i know how the stepmoms can be because stepdads are like that too. she neede that because of all the harm she made.

wow nice

its ok not that scary more boring at the end

I love your scary stories

OMG! i ♥ this! it iz so0o0o0 co0l! nice storii!!

this storie was good and very scary i mean a step mom killing her kids 4 money that was kinda origanil but the end was great

Hey! OMG your story was fantastic i loved it i think all the people that read it think that too.

that was wicked and wierd at the same time but i still liked it but although it was not scary lol

hi

Hi~ I am korean..
I am finding scary story

this wasnt scary!! it was good tho...but not scary in the least little bit

this story is really great it realy keep me in ♥

loved it

This story is great i love it

that was a good story

Omg - Fabulous! Could be a bit more scary though! Im glad Greta died =]

is this a true story and it is quite scary!!!

I'am not scared of one scary movie nor story

that bloddy mary story was interesting but not to scary!i would like to hear it at night. but not just any night. a dark, scary,starless,and stormy night. i would like to scare the crap out of some of my friends. ye hehehehehe. mwa ha ha ha!!!

The story is so good! I am having some friends round for a halloween party and I am going to tell them the stiory!

I really liked it. Except it wasn't that scary. It's perfect, actually. Scared my cousin a lot. You should make a second one, and probably scarier and more... intense. Saddening at the part where in the brothers died.

awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:)

i love bloody mary it is very scary. but i dont care

SCARYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY

omg this srory was really good it wasnt that scary though. :) :) :) :)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I thought this story was so strange not scary but strange.

i love this story

this was wack

this is a good story. but it wasn't as scary as i thought it was

i ve heard about the whole bloody mary thing but its weird how saying it in the mirror and everyone will actually do it but nothing will happen but they will say it did. The story was great because it tells the truth about everyhting. It was sad that charles commited suicide because of gerta. its a good thing she was gone.

this story was REALY SCARY

wow. that was a great story! cant wiat to read another

lol this is sooooo funny i am telling my friends 2morro!!! :) ♥

this story was GREAT but not scary at all try to make it scarier

I loved this story especially at the end when she bursts into flames :-)

cool

That wasn't scary

omg this story is good but def not scary

this is scary

kewlll

this story is good but not so scary

this wasnt scary but it was cool to read but kinda boring so to speak

IT WAS REALLY GOOD I LIKED IT IT WAS THE FIRST STORY I READ ALL THE WAY THROUGH

THIS STORY WAS A GREAT STORY WHO EVER WROTE THIS KEEP WRITING STORYS LIKE THIS AND U WILL HAVE A LOT OF MONEY.***

this story was nice.....
but i still dont blieve in bloody marry even if every body around me do!
cauz ite heck...........its just for fun????????
that what i think about.....

this story was nice.....
but i still dont blieve in bloody marry even if every body around me do!
cauz ite heck...........its just for fun????????
that what i think about..... :)

It was the best story ever especially reading it at night in the dark room. Now that would be scary.=)=)=)=)Bloody Mary rock!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

thiz waz a gud story but it waz not scary nd i wondered if Bloody Mary iz real Happy Halloween kidz

thys story wuz straight but not so scary to me

THAT WAS SO NOT SCARY I HAVE HEARD BETTER ONE'S THAN THAT...!!!

this story is not scary.
But is it true?

omg this was the best story but i mean a mother killing her kids for money. cant wait 2 tell peopleeeeee about it they will be AMAZED!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hey this story is a great story but I think you should leave Bloody Mary in the story for a little longer

wow this story is scary.i cant wait to read another one and see what happends

it was kinda scary but i think it was fake.

WOW this is very scary ILOVE IT♥ forreals.

omg!! that was a good story but not that scarry but still it was sooo awsome i♥it

It was pretty good. i thought it was scary but i've heard scarier

wow this is a great story but i didn't understand it without reading the origanal bloody mary!

Good story do u write professcionally?u should publish that!lol i like it!keep the stories comin

omg that was good but it needs a little more scare..it was too sad

that is so cool i lv it

this story was like so awsome you should write another 1 . yea/

cool i am 9year old and veeery scaaaaared!!

i would freak if i was marie maybe faint or have like a total breakdown

i am 11 that is not scary

it was good

the last story was also good but this was not so scary nothing scares me

this story was..... terific i am only 8 and im not scared of her but her other name is daedly mary............ by faryal

♥im 5 years odl and i read the story all by myslef and it's not scary at all!♥

wow,that was way crazy,loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

that waz cool !it wazent scary

OMG I LOVED THIS STORY,it was so cool and interesting

i am 10 thatwasn't scary at all!

booooo

how can you print this i want to scare my friends?!

omg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

wow that was very scary they should do an even scarier one whooooohoooo was tat fun n cool

it was kinda scary at the end

that was a great story! even though it wasnt scary!!!!!

that total rock it so cool how you use the old bloody mary to get revenged

it was really coooooooooooooool

it was so scary!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

wow nice read it during skool awsome and scary

that story wuz so stupid i dont believe in that stuff ya digg

it is a cool story but is is also scary!!!!!!!!!

I think this story not scary

wow is so not true

it was scary cause i tried bloody mary in the room and i saw her spirt why dont u try it.!

I liked this story. Is it true?

luv it this story is soooooo coooooool!!!!!!!!

Hey I love this stuff I'm so intrested in this stuff please make some more!!!:}

great story

The story was good but it wasnt scary at all... sorry


omg ilovvvvvvvvvvvvvveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee it

it was nice and scary

this was so cool

ey i loved it, make another 1, this 1 iz like SO cool =D ♥^__^♥

this was one of my fave!!!!!!!!!!

dear whoever u r,
have u ever played a game with the real B.M.If not y?

IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII lovvvvvveddddddddd it alot

OMG IS THAT STORY REALLY REAL? I WAS SO SCARED WHEN I WAS READING IT SO WAS MY FAMILY X JODIE HOUGHTON

Good Story!!! Bloody Marys Creepy!!!

I loved the story

omg really scary i shared it with my class due to been a teacher

I loved this story and it was so profound and very nail-biting. Thanks for killing Gerta...she deserved it, that no good, rotten stepmother!

since i looooooooooooove scary stories i love this story

That story was so cool and scary because BM (Bloody Mary) came out of the mirror!!!

From Lillie!
P.S:I can see ghosts but ssshhh that's a secret!!!!!

i think i got goose bumps

i like the story,its great!

It was a awsome stori I just wished richard and charles didnt have to die

AWESOME

I do not think this is scary and I am 9 years old!

i'm only 12, and that story, isn't even scary at all!psh, ha! even my little 7 year old cousin wouldn't even be scared-at all!

love it it was not that scary but it was still cool i hope u get the chills

wow good not that scary tho :) :) :) :) :) :) ♥♥♥

that was a good story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

4 once bloody mary actually did a
good thing!!!!!

Are you sure that Bloody Mary is real? Have you seen her? My friend said "that she is real." I do believe that she is real.

OMG great story. I love it. I am at a slumber party right now so that sure scared them. LOL THANKS

it was kind of scary but i liked it alot. lol :d

wow thats a good story!!!

this is a great story it was scary and i enjoyed it.

great story andwho ever says it sucks is retarded

IM scared of Bm ppl in ma school say dat bm used 2 live in my scool cause dat scool used to be her house and a hospital now dey say it now hauts in da


BAThroom but boys wen in and never ever came back n now the boys in the bathroom here them say justin justinnnn !!

hey now that was a good story but it doesnt sound all that true...but you should still write a book about that someday!!!!!!=)

great story my fav part was the end when mary was calling her name to come would have been awesome if gerta came back from dead and killed her and her father for what they done to her but over all story was great

i love this story but it is not real

i love this story but it is not real

This story was NOT scary at all.

Brilliant Storie

Not scary, but i like it a lot. Im only 11. I bet my little 7-year-old bro will be scared,tho.

this story rocks!~

THAT STORY WAS ALRIGHT IT WASNT RELII DAT SCARY U CUDA WROTE BETTER

this is one of best scary stories I have read.

ITS SO COOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL

this story is sooooooo great.i luv it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

OMG!COOL STORY!how did she not be sad about her dead aunt & brothers,scared by her stepmom and bloody Mary?

not scary

WOW!WHAT A COOL STORY.IT WAS LIKE AWSOME DUDE:)
ME AND MY FRIEND WERE LIKE WHAOOOOOOOOOOOO:O
AWSOME DUDE:)

i loved this story it was so scary

i thought this story kept me on my feet i loved it. it was totally awesome

it wasnt very scary

OMG the story was great but kind sad how the boy did ya i was reely sad. But Berta was so ugly im like ya alil sad know it happens oga buy

Hey ya'll! What's up? I thought this story was really good but I mean everybody makes mistakes. Everybody has those days and everybody know what I'm talking about Everybody gets that way! Peace!
XOXO,
Miley

lalalalaa(:
i was sceeeerd.
great story btw !

dis story is awsome i <3 it for some reason i love being scared

omfg that was scary!!!!

OMJ*
GOOD STORY BUT IM GLAD GERTA DIED. AND DO YOU REALLY HAVE TO BE in the blood line TO CONTACT ANY SPIRIT when you try bloody marry!!!!!

that was really good...i enjoyed it...thanks

i am only 12 years lod and i am still scard of monsters and bloody mary.and i sleep with my mom and dad still

it was very infusiasked but it was horrible her killen the kids if i had step children i would not do that i would be nice to them it was funny how bloody marry got the lady well me and my freinds have been doing the cours at school we only seen he ones but the middle tolit at horton was lighting up really scary do u think?

omg that was alsom i ♥ed it lol☻☻2☻☻☻

NNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!! SSSCARY

good story,not scary though:):(:/

Very intriguing, I enjoyed it a lot

stupid, strange, but SCARY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

so scary and i will hate if she called me little kayla LOL!!!11!1!!!111!11!11!!11!!1!11!!11!11!!1!!11!!1!!1!11!11

thAT WASS boring

how the heck do you find the mirrors!

Love it! Thanks for sharing!

WOW COOL STORY!!!!

i really loved this book

this story was the scaryest story that i have ever read u should read it 2 u will love as much as me !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


We read this story and it was really really really very very very boring and not scary at all!

OMG IT WAS A SUSPENCE BUT NOT SCARY I V BLOODY MARY I TRIED THE CANDLES BUT IT DOESNT WORK AT ALL SO YEA
KEWLL

this was not scary at all i hated it but keep going you all are awsome at writing keep going!!!!!!!!!!

that was a good scary story! i have never found a story that accually interested me

NOT SCARY AT ALL!!!!!! BUT IT WAS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

boooooooo

I liked that but even though you cant sound effects would be better!!!! It's awsome though!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Well I thought it wasnt scary but it was definatly good! OMG I tryed bloody mary and she never got me! yea!!

THAT STORY WAS BORING NOT EVEN SCARY

loved the story-who wrote it?

Very interesting story that makes you imagine the plot...

it was a really scary story for me and my 3 year old brother and i listen to real scary stories and they r really scary and i mean really scary. alexis and andres

WOOT gerta got killed!i can amagine what it looked like and OMG scary,sad, irony,and true!WOOP

i love this story this was my favorite when i was yunger

I love the story of Bloody Mary return, I ♥ to read ghost stories continued making really awesome!

Awsome love it !!!!!!! =)
=)

OMG!!!!LOL!!!! THAT IS AN AWSOME STORY NOW I KNOW THAT SHE DOESNT DO ANY THING UNLESS UR IN CANDLE LIGHT!!!

this story was interesting...

WWWWOOOOWWWW THIS STORY IS REALLY COOOLLL BBBUUUUTTT NNNNOOOOTTTT SCARYYYY!!!!!!!

:D WOOOW :(

the story was asome!!!
and the end was amazing!!!!!!!! peace

that was brilliant

this story was scary for my little cousen this story was cool!!!!

nice

HEY PEOPLE THATN WAS LAME AND WAS NOT SCARY

that was lame and so not scary well bye

that story was koo!!!!!!!!!

this story was so random but totally awesome. i loved it, it was the most extraodanary story. now i know why bloody marry doesen't work when i do it in my house or in school with my friends. cool story!

alrigh.but i dont scare easily and im ten yrs old

OMG!!!!!!! THAT WAS SOOOOO NOT SCARY BUT IT GAVE ME COLD CHILLS BUT I LOVED IT SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO BAD I PRINTED IT OUT

horible worst story ever

Thiz story was good i enjoyed reading it i have 2 say tat ur a great author wow.

Ok,
not to be mean but the storie was offle!!! i hated it...Not really but it wasn't scary! sorry im 9 years old and i adore violince!

this story is not scry but kixnda good!!!!!

wow i was so scared

this storie was not scary but it was awsome i liked it but i hope they make a second one but it better be cool like the frist one my favorite part was when the step mother got killed and got sent to bloody mary and the girl was fighting for her freedom the part that was sad is when gerat killed the boys but the good thing is she died and will never come back won't even return thats wat i need to say peopleeeeessssss

pretty good!
(not scary!!)
cool!

Great Story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is a really good story but i dont know if it really could hppen probably not!

i couldnt be bothered to read it so next time try to put it on audio so poor people dont have to read it the r old

This was a really crappy scary story I'm not scared by Bloody Mary

the story is nice

wow!!!! its really not that scary. well a little bit but its good

wow!
i love ghost stories this is awsome dude!
well done!

THIS STORY WUZ KIND KREEPY BT DA BEST PART WUZ DA ENDN' !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AGAIN AWSOME STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SCARY STORIES , MYSTERY, RULE!!!!!!!!!! DO I HATE READIN'!!!!!!!!

Wow like it, I have seen the episode its supernatural! When you said it it makes a lot more sense but I think you changed it! Well done! XD

this sucked

this story was so stupid

so cool not scary love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

OMG THIS IS SOOOOOOOO COOL BUT IT COULD BE JUST A LIL BIT MORE SCARIER! LOL BUT KEEP ON TELLING MORE GREAT STORIES!

that storie was just great and i mean great i love that storie

THE STORY WAS AWSOME I LIKE WHEN BLOODY MARY KILLED GETRA

this story was wikid awsome dude. P.S,it was scary too!!!!!!!![loved it. love, alc(lexisnichole clark)

wow that was amazing i loved it!!

i wasnt scared and thats why my pant r wet

this story was interesting but deff. not scary!

This wasnt scary but it made sense and it was really cool.

omg this was kinda scary

i love the part where Gerda went with bloody mary that was great.
that was scary and i loved it.:) :) :) :) :) :) :) :0 :( :( :()

Heh, heh, heh. that b*tch got what was coming to her!

that was ssooooooooooooooo good!make more. its sad that charels & richard died! ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha Greta!

OMG I LOVE YOU STORY IT WAS GOOD AND AWESOME BUT I WISH I HAVE A GOOD SCARY STORY

I really really like yoir scary stories

lol that was awesome

WOW!! that is so cool!! so awsome that Girta is good as gone!!! woohoo!!! LOL i think im a little to hyper!! Heehee!!

it was so awesome and scary i love scary movies scary stories.

the was awsome and i loved the part where bloody mary came in that mirror it put chillsssss down my throat and back i hope mt ansetser did not burn her(bloody mary)body!!!!!!!!!
:( :) :( :) /:( :) :( :) :( :) :( :) :(

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaarrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrhhhhhwoow

this story was cool. I cant wait till the next one comes out!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

this story wuz awsome

omg!!!!!!! this story was of the hook! dam but it was scary at the same time.

cool and not really scary

OMG that was the koolest story ever!!!!!! I ♥ it :)(:

AAhhAHa!!!!!! sSsSoooOO sCarY......NoT.....Da Story Iz Gud Bt Itzz Nt Scaryyyy....YYuuuuYU NId To Go To Skullll Nd Learn Wt A Scariii Story Issss.....HaHaHaHaHaHaHa.........JJJKeeeE!!!!!.......

>>>tc<<<

so dum you really beleave that crazy person!!!lier

boringg!!!!!

OOOOOOOO I <3 it SOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH!!!!!IT IS VERY SCARY COS IT IS 9:33PM
OOOOOOOOOH!!!!! IM GONNA HAVE NIGHTMAres though............ O WELL!!!! IM A GHOST HUNTER IM USED TO IT!

OMG i loved the story and i heard that you go to a bath room alone and turn off the lights and say bloody mary 3 times and she comes alive and hurt you

That was sooooo NOT scary Its a good story but that was not scary at all .You need to learn what a scary story is.!!!!!!!!!!

omg it was awsome i lovvvvvvvvvvvvve it#1!

OMG!!!!!!!! i love the story.it was scary and PERFECT i want to read another one right now

omg first time mary rules XD

not scary

OMG the best story ever! i lv it it is kinda scary lolx!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

omg i thought it would freak me out but this was good

HAY NICE JOB

i liked this story but it wasnt as scary as i thought it would be ! !

wow i bet my 5 years old sister knows a scarerier story!

This stori was interesting i loved it but is was so0o0o0o0o0o0 not scary make scarier stories!!!!

this not scary at all! i didn't like it! But i do beleive in BLoody Mary!

I enjoyed it...but you know children do this "Bloody Mary" thing because its a myth or legend... I wonder who really "Bloody Mary" is?

that was a good story people should read it

i didn't like it

haha. Stupid hag.
Got killed
serves her right

It was a good one

poooooooooooooop crap poop

that was very scary!!!!!! I wouldn't read that alone in the dark

its real

this story was like a fether pillow very soft

nice but this is not scary you cant say you are mary you cant even spell it right

so cool

GRRRRRRRRRRRRRREAT STORY!!!!!! LUVD IT!!!

U spelled evil wrong.

yes i agree it wasnt scary but beautiful story..... it thaught it was gerta who is bloody mary....(at first i read it)

omg so getto

omg this is soooooo alsome loven it

I LOVED IT!!!!!!! MAKE A SECOND!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is an awsome story

i loved this story it was scary and awesome and i hope you can make a sequel for this sequel. im going to go buy your book

oh! it was great story!
spooky!!!

this story is so what ev

wow not scary but its true wow now thats scary

wickied story. i emo n i got scared

aawwweeeesssssoooooommmmmmmeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!

this is so scary.1 mor e night wit bloody mary

I love this story, but for a second i thought marie was actualy bloody mary

woow

Dat was cool... Not as scary. My friend and I thought. WE know a better Bloody Mary one.

That was rubbish and quite boring and not scary at all

this wasmt scary at all sorry. im still bored. nothing ever scares me.

SCARY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thats a very good story ...:]

Thats a very good story ...:]

that was awesome can i date you?

Wow this was amazing!!!

ok that was good but not scary one bit. that was awesome when BLOODY MARY did her magic! :)

thats was wwwwwwwooooooooowwwwwwwww man

it was not scary at all

it was ... AWESOME!

I'm really into scary stories, even if they don't scare me, and I thought this 1 was awsome!

i wish i was marie

that was so kool but not as scary as mine stouy of
bloody mare

this is so not scary

cool

THAT WAS PREETY CHILL BUT IT WAS LONG

the story was awesome i just hated that the 2 brothers had died but what i want 2 kno is what happened 2 the step mother

it was so scary

this was not scary....bloody mary isnt even real....we tryied this at a birthday party.........sosoooooo sooooo not reall!!!!!!

OMG THIS WAS THE BAST BLOODY MARY STORY TOLD YET!!! IT EVEN GAVE ME THE CHILLS!!!!!!!

GREAT STORY! i like it but 2 bad 4 da bros ya kno well l8rz!

that story was soooooo cool i liked the last bit when bloody merry cam from the mirror U SOO SHOULD MAKE A SECOND!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

so boring it was CRAP made me go to sleep!!!!!!!!!!!!

cool storie so wicked loved it

This was pretty scary but I ♥ed it! Make more! •_•

Hey I love this story and it was so scary and I am glad she stuck up for her self and this story is so great (lol)!!!!

OMG thats was soo scary that i couldnt finish it im so scary and wen i reading my mouse(the arrow)began to move as i was readin this story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

hey this is an awesome story .

most stories are scary. not this one. but it was still good,i still enjoyed it!

it was not a bit scary and im not even 10 im 9

i loved it my sis is so scared

the story of bloody mary always scared me

that was soOoOoOoOo ScArY!AWSOME

Omg, so not scary i think itll have to happen in real life to no how its is :) <3 =] x

i loved it !

it was great and a littel scray for my age /9/... i know that story is not even true/so wat it a littel creepy /but the creepest one is LA LLORONA or LA LLORONA KILLS HER KIDS/////////////SPOOKY

it was kind of dum and good /spooky at the same time

BLOODY MARY BLOODY MARY
BLOODY MARY......

MAke another.

Dude, that totally wasn't scary! But dude! I TOTALLY LOVED IT!

this story is so so so so so so so so so so so so so scare I wanted to buy it for 50$

I LOVE THE STORY IT IS THE BEST STORY EVER EVEN THOUGH IT WASNT SCARY AT ALL BUT ITS PERFECT FOR HALLOWEEN

i love bloody marry i got to do that o my step mom lol i hate her to lol

good not scary but good good beganing and end

yo
this is the real thing!!!1 i did bloody mary and its not real
for normal people
but i did it and it worked
cause i see dead people

thats a heck o a story that was kind of scary thanks for sharing

thats a heck o a story that was kind of scary thanks for sharing

I LOVE THAT STORY

its great

Wow that was creepy i am sooo sending that to my friends in an email!!!

need more scary put its cool

good story

i luv it i think it was sorta scary i luv bloody mary i wis she was real!!!!!

this is not scary at all

I LUVVED DA STORIE EVEN THOUGH IT WASNT ALL DAT SCARRY BUT ENYWAYS IT WAS AN AWESOME STORIE ND I LIKED IT VERY MUCH

this story was awesome i just couldnt stand being away i scared the eff word out of my friends i cant belive they thought it was really real and we slept in a tent that night and when i woke up in the morning they were gone and i was like what the h*ll and they were in my room and i sceamed at the top of my lungs and they all woke up i scared the crap out of them

story is so creepy

I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!AND THIS STORY WAS SCARY

this story was LAME!!!not scary at all!!! STUPID:(

oh my god i am going to have a night mare

lol that was fuuny gerta got wat she desirved bloody marie acually did a good thing for once

o

F**K yeah that was awsome your the master of fright!!!!!!!!!...........

liked it. a different twist on the whole 'bloody mary' tale

that story was awsome =).....
you neeed to come up with a nother one =)

I read this and didn't think it was even that scary!!!! My friend read it first and told me that it was really creepy but I just thought it wasnt all that scary!!! lol!!!!

this was a good story not so much scary but still i liked it

boreding story i hate it

great story

that was ok it wasn't scary at all im lookin for a story to tell my class for halloween this is not my number 1 but if i dont find anything else it definetly will be!!! :D

wow i really read all of it wow it was awsome but it wasnt scary !

this stori was awsome

This was a o.k. stori

This was awright

wat's up this story was off the chain!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This story is amazing. I took it into my school at Longridge Towers School in Berwick to show my English class.

it was carzy but not scarey

thi story wasent scary at all

Hey! I LOVED the story!!LOL!

it is awesume!!!!!!!!!!

awesome dis story is so cool

omg that was the stupidest story ever it wasnt even scary

Great story im only 11 and it didnt scare me at all

SCARY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

good sotry omg

lol

so boring

It was not scary but I was interested.

hey....these are boring ...i like scary stories

This was the coolest story ever. Me and my friends tried it but it didnt work im glad knowing wat couldve happend scarrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrry

WHO EVER THINKS THIS IS SCARY IS A LITTLE TINY MOUSE NO AFENCE BUT IT WASNT SCARY TO ME

this story waz da bom i lik luv it tht waz some feaky stuff

OMG OMG OMG. so cool..hehehehehehehehehe!!!i wannna read it ova n ova again. but, make it a lil scarier. dere was no HEAD GETN CHOPPED N STUFF =( OH WELL :)

lily-it was ok to me but im the scary monster i dont get scared of everything but this scared me a little

Larissa-yea it was pretty scary but i have heared way more scary stories than that one but,yea cool.

This story was awesome.Wow. I havent heard a good one in while

HEY!OMG! I LOVED THIS STORY I HAVE ALWAYS WONDERED WHY THAT DIDNT WORK AT SKOOL...

not to great

not scary :(

wow this story was tight

..Intresting..not as 'scary' as I would of assumed. The idea, however, is very creative. Poor thing the two brothers lost their life...

scaryyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

I AM SO READING THIS STORY ON HALLOWEEN NIGHT

Scary story, but a good one too! I might tell this at school tomorrow

this thing was so not scary it was f***ng hilarious d**m straight

it is spectaculer

that was so true trust me ive seen her before

I live in Montana!OMG!SO CREAPY!

This is the best story ever! It is NOT scary at all. I loved this story soo much. I read Bloody Mary and Bloody Mary Returns to my little sis. She freaked! = D

awesome stori

wow that was awsome not really scary tho.:(
and go to fake when bloody mary reached her arms out and gerta burst into flames

this was a _w_e_s_o_m_e_
- - - - - -

This story is awsome!!!!!!!

that was a great story.lol you should make another one.that was a scary story.I wish I was Bloody Mary.

so not scary!! and fyi, so many comments here! and they r pretty much all lame because no one is going to read them all!! ;)

Oh. How interesting. Is that a true story?
I would like to try that on my evil stepmother.

Wow tight

okay so basically, this story was pretty dull. if people found this story "scary" they have to be very young and gullible. i have read ten of this sites stories this halloween night, and i guarantee my sleep shall not be effected tonight.

i liked this
story it was kool
and [[SCARY]]to

THE STORY WAS SUPERB !GOOD THING THAT EVIL WOMAN IS GONE :D

its so cool hardly scary & ending was the best

i love scary stories just like this one of Bluddy Mary Returns.

It's super coool and scary.

love much cool,malibu

come on this isn't that bad. I heard scarier stories then this one

omg that wasnt scary and im 11 but i liked it

Sophia, the very first comment - it's a she. Very good story.

this stor was cool.:] but it would be a better story if it was a bit more scary. ;]

OMG That was awsome please make more scary stories like that . But make it b about bl00dy mary this story was perfect it was scarry t00 PEASE LOVE :]

Killer story!

OMG it's like the best story i have ever heard it's not that scary though

I LOVED STORY AND I BELIVE
IN BLOODY MARY

lol awesome

scary!!!!!!!!

Omg!!!! This story was good ...I myself believe int theses kind of things

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I DIDN'T FINISH IT BECAUSE IT SCARED ME!

I LOVE YOUR STORY

i like this book ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

i loved it

that was not scary

that is one of my favorite stories

i hate it its lame

OMIGOD THATS SCARY.....

everyone says bloody Mary scary it is but this is FUNNY L.o.L

OMG THAT IS SO NOT SCARY LOL

hey have u ever read humans can lick 2? it freaked me out!

hey i lllooovvveeeddd your story.

OMG this story was cool but it wasn't scary at all
I still liked this story and another day i'll read it again. i never read a story this good and i am glad i got to read it. i don't know why it wasn't scary most people thought it was but i don't think so. thank you for writing a very good story. i loved it alot

D=) lol it was good

ive seen her and she is so real

i loved it ...but it wasnt scary ♥♥♥

that was killer

this story is nice but not that scary but i liked it you can do better OMG bloody mary wasnt scary but it was sad that the 2 bros died cause of gerta i hate gerta and loved the guts of mary and also hated the dad AWESOME!!!!!!

one word...stupid.

my friend got dragged by bloody may

wowowowowowowowowowowwowowowow scary if my step mom was like that i wud have done just the same

My two cousins don't believe me about this story but I believe because this one time I was in the bathroom and I saw her!!! Scared the s**t out of me.

good story

not at all scary. it also needs 2 b way longer. im very picky, have u noticed?

great story!!!!!

She deserved to die.

This story was great and kind of scary

Little bit scary but good! =]

OMG!! it is the bestt ghost story ive eva heard!
i like tha part when bloody mary took gerta ;]
my frends were so scaredd... theyy were like praying everytime i saidd bloody mary xD soo funny!
and they were like hugging me all the time.. LOL. funn timess lmfao!!

stupid story

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OMG IT WAS AMAZINGLY STUPIED

OMG IT WAS AMAZING LOVED IT COOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL

WHAT UP AND I LOVED THE STORY

Cool. :)

whew!! this is one good story! it got me at the edge of my seat... :)) nice one!

♥♥♥♥

scary but I loved it!!!!! lolololololololololol

creeper than twilight but i would say great! 100%

lol so not scary

awesome

okay just to be reasonable..
b-mary was actually the hero in this story.

wow that was so amazing, I loved it I love the bloody mary story and this was like a way more contemporary take on it!! loved it

that was very sad when the stepmother killed marina's brother and how her father would not listen to the little girl how awful that must be....

i love ghost stories but this is the best of all...but scary...hehe~so just read it...i heard a lot of bloody mary's story and i saw the picture when she was alive!!...she was a pretty!!

this is soooooo not scary like ........how stupid can u get xxxx

this story is not scary it is funny but scary 2 i lyk it i think who ever made this story is the best ever i think they should write more storys lyk that best ever :):):):):):):):):):);)

that was so cool i wasn`t that scary and i`m eight

WOW This was amazing! I love the storys of bloody mary i tried it once and i never saw my chicken again..

it was not scary i m 9

loved the storrry [;

on the first part it was cool but one of the kids in my class in leo j leo chanted her name in the boys bathroom and said nothing in at the end of the first story it said anyone foolish to chant her name three times in front of a dark mirror the thing will do to you is the same thing that happened to her and will be trapped in the mirror forever.

wwwwwwwwwwweeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaakkkkkkkkkk. my little sister can do better

aawweessoomeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!

it was cool

[it was stupid and dum]

i am sooo glad that marie called bloody mary when she had 'cause otherwise she would have been dead as well and that would have been really sad.. i can't believe gerta killed marie's brothers..
that is soo sad..

it was weird but kool, not any movie though? that was crazy

this was so not scary at all lol u all that think it was are sad ppl lol

wow this story was great i ♥ it....i ♥ the way "Marie defendes herself and her father....

that was so scary ill never do that

That was not scary but it was a really good story!! Cant wait til u make another 1!!!

It needs more action with BLOODY MARY!

I loved it .but why bloody mary didn't kill the girl?other then that I loooooooooooooooooooooooovvvvvvvvvd it

cool that served her right

It was a good story ... Wish it was more scary tho
:D=

it was cool

hey, what goes around comes around

lol funny

I though it was pretty cool

but it still wasn't exactly scary, It is so hard to find good horror stories anymore.

stupid story..not even scary. b.s. cud'v been much better. waste of time

NOT SCARY!!! but i good story to read and i feel sorry for the girls bros

this was so NOT scary!!! but i LOVED it like totally!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (:

f*** ya tht ws awesome

THIS STORY WAS AWESOME I WROTE A STORY TO

ghost arent real it is just the devil getting into your mind if you dont let god protect you so it isnt real

its was ehh....

I wish it was SCARRRIER.

it was lame

cool

HI~
I'm Malaysian.I'm here to look for some scary movies.I have a strong sense of creepy aura and since i read your stories somehow i feel that &%^& aura is at mirror somehow.That give me a creep and quickly i open my room door (since i afraid of ghost yet i love).For real,Your story total creep yet I LOVE IT.

this story kinda freaked me out cause i heard deep breathing when i was reading it out loud. yikes!!! freaky!!!

pritty friky but it was cool 8 words wate a horrable thing to doooooooooooooooooooo

dis story iz sooo reall so yall need ta be quiet about dis fo she kum get you

that was so scary i peed my self

That was really good, and even if its not scary in word form it would be scary if it happened to me in real life! It kinda reminds me of the orphan

BLOODY MARY IS STUPID YOU GUYS ARE JUST WASTING YOUR TIME HAHA

omg i am with my friend and they think it was awesome story my friends are freacing out except me lol

the story was cool but... dont u think the father would no if his son was doing drugs or something? and y would charles kill himself if he new his sister would b coming in 2 days? u would think the father would not trust gerta 2 send richard off 2 boarding school cuz of wat happened 2 charles the father was pretty stupid though so now as i am writing this i understand the answers 2 all the questions i asked but it was a pretty awesome story im glad gerta is dead umy recommendation is that u read bloody mary 1st then bloody mary returns then u would understand it more then when it says long ago her really old and dead grandmother almost got killed (the millers daughter)her father (the miller) shot bloody mary in the hip well k well ba bye

this story is wow!!!!!!!!!!

dis was cooooooool! ah lov it. dis story iz soo reel. it reminds me of the horror "The Orphan".

This story isn't really spooky, but great. However, I just wanted to know why did Bloody Mary ignore Marie when she was the one who truly summoned her and was a direct descendant of the farmer who killed her? I assumed that Marie's measures would somehow backfire, since the curse was initially for them (the descendants of those villagers)and Gerta was just a bonus.

This story was really verry good. It was nice. thanx.

stupid!!!

be careful if u hav mirrors

ive been scared of bloody mary for a long time its nice to know i dont have the right mirror

Whoa!!!!!!! What a great story I loved it!@#!@! It was Aw3some I loved it that the main character stood up for herself and killed the Stepmother

that waz AWSOME

it was borung

it number one

that is guna b a good joke on my lil bro lol

i loved this story

coool

omg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!soo awesome this storie is spooky but awesom

NICE!!!!

this is not scary at all

not good at all!

i loved it loved it

that was a good story i love it

that was the best storie ever it was not that scary well i dontt think itt wasss.

its ok.....not that scary

cool i like that thats cool

this story was freaken scary!!!!! thanks for writing it can you make another one i will always read your stories******* !!!!!!!!!

this story was like totally awsum dudes nd it isnt even that scary

that was a awesome story thanks for telling it im gonna tell it at my sleepover friday

awsum story i loved it,it was out of this world

this is gay and not real. I did it exactly how it says tio and nothing happend~!

WOW WOW WOW This story is great everything seemed real the only thing that didnt seem real was the wand

Not bad but cudve been a bit better original and new it had a nice begining and the end was rly unheard Good job whoever posted it

Dat was fantastic

haha i loved it

AWESOME STORY!!!!!!

gerta deserved to die im glad that she stood up for herself

that was a rly great storie it was scary but i loved it

omg! THIS STORY IS SOOOOOOOOOO gay!imean who believes in bloody mary

that was pretty good but it didnt scare me.

this is such a good story can u make another one i love reading scary stories like bloody mary !!!!!!! BUT next time can u make it more scary

Awesome greta deserved wut she got it could have been scarier and it needed more detail!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

THIS WAS AMAZING.
I write alot of short stories but this was a really good one. Make another, PLEASE.

i loved it!!! it was great and scary is there a book on the myth????

everyone must be because i know someone that is a descendant of one of the villagers that helped to burn her and one time her father found her doing it with a very old mirror he almost died from seeing what her daughter was doing until he told the story about the family's poor girl she was pale because that day we didn't do it anymore knowing that scare

haha its 10 pm and i have dun bloody mary and the results wer terrifiying.and thats wat the stepmother gets!!!!!!!

wow

It's really nice.

I liked it! I really liked it! It was spooky and revengeful and that stepmother really got what she deserved. I'm glad that those "friends" of Gerta are so vulnerable:) It was a good bloody mary story...heck it was a good story.

ooooommmmmgggg
aaahhhhhhhhhhhhhahhhhhhh=^o

cool that was gr8 i thought it was just in front of a mirror but it was in front of a person who lived in her village mirror cool!!!!!!!

lol im so scARED A JK i luv sacry stories

OMG! i absolutely adore ghost stories and scary stories and that! and this wz A-MAY-ZING! u should so make a third one. maybe like if the mirror broke, bloody mary and greta would cum bk 2 life, seeking their revenge of the 1s that let them die! it would be awsome! XD! xxx

Scary as crap man. Almost peed my pants!

Wow! I loved that. I agree TOTALLY MAKE A THIRD STORY.Spooky but not scary.
Bloody Mary stories aren't true, right?

that was sooooooo scary i think im gonna crap in my pants.lol

It was an ok story. i wouldnt want to be a lone and read it

if you read the first story abo9ut bloody marry, then read this one, they totally fit together. AWESOME!!!!!!!:)

That was sooooo creepy!! I read the first bloody mary and then read this one so i totally got what it was sayin'!! <3

WOW at my party im gonna tell all my friends that story. Love the story! Definately will scare all my friends.......
By the way, the words to say are....
mori martrey.... try it!!!

wHOA!!!!!
that was sooo creEEEpppYYY!!!!grrrrr..i gOT the cHiLLzzz...

Dam that's a good scary story

interesting. that girl has the same name as me!!!... anyways...so does that marie a witch too???

this story is great..
i really love it..

that was crap...
i could think up of a better story than thatt mate! :)

omg this is like so fake

wow! It's real scary one! So cool but chilling!! I'm craving for more BLOODY MARY Stories!!

Man,I was so scared and freaked out,awesome!!!!!

BEST STORY EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

did u know thats true? and im actually a direct decendent of that woman. and now the curse is very hard to work today because most of the rituals were lost but otherwise very correst story!

we would appreciate this if you'd make the voice for this one too !

It is like a film story ........Dont know whether to believe or no !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

i loved it it was long but great!!!!

Bum story. Wasent even scary. if you think this is scary your a baby.

ome like scariest thing ever i ve always been terrified of bloody mary legends ever since the first time i heard one great here goes another month without looking at a mirror lol=-) what told u it scares me!!!!!!!!

not scary story was good.hate getra..

the story was awesome but not at all terrifying...more like "ah" instead of "AIEEEEEEEEEE"
:3

The story wasn't very scary...but it was the BEST story on this sight!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

omg where in class at school bored, this story was really good we loved it :D

that was the best

That was scarey I fell off me seat 3 times!

i♥dihz story[:

that was an scaryyyyyyyyy story

gerta deserved it

kool story and that step mother deserved it

i think was quite a freaky story but also kinda wicked
if theres other stories about bloody mary im gonna read them 4 definite.im into all that stuff like bloody mary and vamps and that kinda fing.

woooooo ... what a story ...

Really good story, but it wasn't scary at all. Needed more suspense.

OMG THIS STORY WAS FAB BUT NOT SCARY

it was a good story it had a good twist. but the one thing bad about it was it wasnt scary. but still good story :))))

amazing!!!

BOO! pretty gooooooooodd<3

That was so freaky if it was true i would hate to be that girl.

wow, is that true?If it is then .....WOW!

Hehe. (:

i like it... really... the story's cool... I just wonder if bloody mary is really true... I heard stories about her before and it scared me to death... but, yeah... I don't really mind...

I thought it was great!! The way Marie stood up for herself and fought. It's sad about her brothers though. I'm glad my stepmom isn't like that!! Oh, back to the story. Also, I love how Marie was able to do that. Stand up for herself and "murdered" her evil witch of stepmother! :)

wow i was in the bathroom reading this wow this thing is not nearly scarey

That was the best story i read out of al the other stores u should make more loved it soo much you should write storie for people all over the world that how good you are well bye

this story is a good story. bloody mary haunted me for about 3 years when i was a kid and i also begged my mom to put sheets over my bedroom mirror. haha but im over that.

cricket cricket

awesome story!!!!!!!!!

jk it was ok

AWSOME STORY BETTER THAN THE FIRST ONE AND IN THE STORY WHEN THEY SAY KIDS SCARE THEM SELFS IT'S TRUE!

Good

this has got to be the coolest story ever

nice cant wait to read another lol by the way it was kind ov skary

it was a little scary

great story!!!i'm so glad that she was safe :-)

totaly loved it, but not scary!

that was creepy

that was so good!!!

i love bloody mary stories she is a real witch

coooooooll story!!!!

really good story. cant wat to scare my little sis with this one!!!!!!!!!!!!

this is a good story not scary but i LOVED it.

can't wait to tell my 4 year old this story already told him the first one he got so scard he slept with me for 3 months

Sounds true as stepmom would always kill her step-children for money and the ending was good keep it up!

you all are a bunch of babbys that was not scary that waz awesom............ :)

Is this myth Latin American???

very good tail so awsome not scarry i am nine

omggg i lovee thestorie evil step mother!!!!!

NOt bad!!! Thats Cool!

That story was so awesome!(and creepy) :D

that was great!

Cinderellaish with a horror movie twist

that story was cool :)

wow,that was the scariest thing i have ever seen, not that is unreal

wow spooky muh hahahahahaa evil laugh

I hate Gerta!! Shes bull! Pity marie's brothers and stupid marie's father!!

This waz the scariest story ever... I had nightmares atleast for a whole week

wow awesome cool i always HATED gerta cause she married my dad and she tryed to kill me but old dad knew he divorced her HA HA HA u diserved gerta

thats kinda scary since bloody mary came out
but it would be scarier if she sliced of greta's head or something
but its sad when the brothers die
i dont have any periods :D
lucky that greta died though
but wasnt marie supposed to
be killed too cuz she summoned her

Omg.. AWESOME, the first one was a little more frightning but this one was great. Good job!

freaky!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Wow that story was awesome keep em coming

yayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyY!

where could i find the podcast?

awesome its from MONTANA!!!

Scaryyyyyyy

this book well part of a story was not really scary because it's not even al;l detailed and im already lost but the story/book is a good book overol!!!!!!!!!!!!:)

AWESOME!!! Wow its so unbelievable and great!

This was sooooooo coooooool it was so scary .

that was great

that was great

nice story .. i hate scary stories because they go overboard with things sometimes and scares me too much. but this was TREMENDOUS. excellent job ! :)

omg it was awesome tho it was not very scary

that was a great story!!!!! love it lol

OMGGGG WAT A GREAT STORY LOVED IT IT HAD ME WONDERING WAT WOULD HAPPEN NEXT LOVED ITT

that was so awesome i love that

that was so awesome i love that

I love your story very much

Luv it!

That was an awesomme!!!!! story

That story was awsome!!!!!!!

i am so scared of the story i almost peed my pants

wow!! the girl is so brave calling bloody mary!!!!...

liked the story but wasnt really scary:) loved the story though!

i thought it was scary!! we went camping and red the story i dont thank i got much sleep but i gess i am scarie cat (lol)

wow that was pretty cool:)

i loved it

I thought that if you flush the toilet 3 times then bloody mary would come, i guess not. :)

haha, thats a pretty good story :) I luv the ending. Greta was really mean! >:C But if these stories were ment to beh scary.. THEY FAIL XD

holy cow! creepy

this is a awesome creepy scary storie all mixed in 1 i loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

this story is nothing compared to a story that me and my friends are writing about, its scary. but i really liked the part where the stepmother gets burned, :) i thought it was hilarious.
but it seems that every time i chant her name a face appears...but maybe its just my imagination;)

i like the story! Gerta had it coming, killing richard and charles!

great story..

awesome it took me while to read because of school

great story it wasnt that scary though

Fire with Fire. I just love stories where the evil ones receive their punishment similar to their own deeds but at a much larger scale.

Killing the enemy with his own gun is exceptionally great fun.

wow

OMG! that was freakin creepy! it scared the crap out of me! Im sooooo telling my friends! that will scare them to death! Finally we know the truth of bloody marie!!

wow.

i thought the first bloody mary was quite scary. this i one is not that scary but i think its a great story!!

Dude this is cool bloody mary saved the day! :D lololololol

I loved it!! It was very interesting.

omg that was sooo scary hehe but i loved it :)

I think it was awsome

i have done that ritual , it doesn't work though. [sad face ]. love the story !!!!!!!!!!!!

Great story!!!!!!! You should make a second part

OMG!!!!!!!!!!! this was the best story I heard...EVER!!!!!!!!!!

wow!!!amazing best scary story in my life!!!a little scary but very good starting middle and coclusion.by the way i just read this for an assignment but turns out i have learned a alot from this story sounds like a professional story u should make a haunted america book ur very good at scary stories!:p

i was scared but it was awsome

AWESOME FIGHT EVIL WITH EVIL

this is hilarious i dont know why but it is

ha that was a really cool story love it

that was soooo scary i couldnt sleep well done whoever wrote it

it scared da freakin hell out of me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! theres a doll in my corner nd its staring at me!!!!!!!! gr8 story!!!!!!!!!

omg very good and scaryy :]]] <3

that was soooo creppy!

omg i loved this story.....thanks for the awesome idea

this is a good book and I have did that before Idid not go into my my bathroom for days

omg.......love the story

i like it caus it is scary n caus it is cool 2010 :] this is almost mifavorite story

WOW luved it and how can peeps say it wasn't good it was the bomb i am going to try Bloody mary at my Halloween party in a weeks time. AHHHHHHHH so yea it was awesome make another one PLEASE

i liked it

i love this story it is so funny?

i love this story it is so funny?

we did not like it we loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

tht story was AWSOME cant wait to read more of ur stories:)

good story i liked it its sad but still cool={*!

that story was amazing you should continue it i loved when that ugly mean lady died

love this story
it's soo detailed
and it's just a wonderful story
great for telling on halloween

OMG SOOOOO SCARY I LOVED IT THO!!!!!

awesome story loved it!!<3

that was brilliant, good thinking marie. well done.

it was alright i did like it :)

LOVE IT!

That was a really freaky story! My whole house has soo many mirrors that cover all of the wall, so now im kinda freaked. :) haha

wasnt scary but awsome

this was a great story

it wsz asome

it was really sad when both the brothers die,and when only mary was left.it was really good story i love it!!!!!

This was a great story. It really kept me in. Please make another one. I <3 it. By the way, perfect amount of writing. Thanks for making my day. :)

aaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! my cosin tried that and the next day we had a funeral

woah....woah....woah....wait for it....THAT WAS SO AWESOME!!!!!!! i think this is one of the stories that has the most number of comments! awesome

I love blood mary stories every time I read them and some one comes up behind and scarcies me. It is funny

i can't go to bed now im scared so scared :( im going to die now

it gave me shivers lol :)

this story wasn't scary at all

really good just what i was looking for lol did not think it was going to be that scary

lOVED IT!

it was very good!!

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

love the story although i think it was a little scary. okay alot scary!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

omg this is reallllllllly good! i liked it A LOT. not really scary but still amazing :)

wow.,. marie was great she was able to survive her near death on the train.,.,. gerta deserved it,., hahaha little scary though

wow great story... very imaginative. Not scary though

this story isnt really all that scary but it did have it's moments =D

scarrry!

THIS WAS AWESOME AND SOO NOT SCARY IT WAS AMAZING TOTALLY SUPER COOL

TOTLY COOL!

Cool

this story was the best i was always looking for stuff like this it was amazing u should make a new one like ware the brothers haunt gerta.

THIS STORY ROX AND I AM SO GLAD THAT I KNOW THE TRUE STORY NOW!!! MY FRIENDS ALWAYS WONDERED WHY IT DID NOT WORK FOR THEM AND NOW I CAN TELL THEM WHY! THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!!!

this is not scary

omg it wasnt all that scary but it was a cool story.

Is this true cause its a good storie,but I don't know what to beleive???

OMG I LOVED IT WAS KIND OF SCARY

Omg!!
I cant belive the part when they all start dancing to the macarena! That was scaaaaaaary! X)

this is a really scary even if i dont believe in ghost.

It was so scary that is why I hate this story the most , but I can't stop reading it!

I'm scared

good

this story was relly scarry but so cool

Thats sooooome Karma there gerta.

wow i really liked this story i was finished w/ it and my cat walked by and scared the living crap out of me

I went to a b-day party with my bff and her grandpa was telling ghost stories and he went BOO and my velma wig off of scooby doo fell off but this story was not as scary as the first bloody mary though

that was a good story when i looked how long is was i was like i'm not reading this and i started and i couldnt stop

awesome story!!!!!

is it true. if it is what is the native tonge

That's a good story. Now I know why it didn't work!

ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh scary!

OMG I LOVE THIS STORY ITS SOOOOO COOL WOOT WOOT

omg so scary i love u dario

really wierd... i really liked it :^)

Good story, but not scary.

i almost peed myself

cool

wow!!! my favorite part was the part when bloody mary killed gerta! i love it!

NOT really ScAry

that is scary OMG

this story was great but so not scary!!!! I've heard diffrent stories abot B.M. that where way scarier than this

That story wasnt scary at all ive heard of better ones than this one but it sound familiar like something that happend to me a long time ago

This story was really good and i love it.

nice story i thought it was intelligent and creative in every way possile never have i heard such a scary fun story thank you for sharing it with us

scary

It was ok, but wierd. I thought her dad was a total idiot.

this was a great story, i could vividly picture the scenes because of your good sensory details and imagery. awesome, i love it !

THAT WASNT SCARY BUT IT WUZ COOL

awsome

thats was a good story i loved how you showed greta who's boss and im sorry about your brothers they sound like good people

It was a dark and scary nite a woman and her dog were getting in to bed the dog always slept under neath the bed for some reason the woman heard a dripping noise so she checked the faucets and went back to bed then she heard it again drip drip drip she was still laying in bed so she let her dog lick her bed she lets him do that everytime she gets scarred thrn she got out of bed and checked the downstairs Faucet when she saw her dog hanging with blood dripping that was the noise then she wandered what was licking her hand if her dog was dead the whole time???!!!??!!

this is the greates scary storie ever told

funny haha

Awesome, really scary too loved it!

i loooooooooved it is the best scary storie ever!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:):);)

scary

this story was the bomb!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Best story i've ever read!!!!

lol scary but i liked it

great story loved it!!!! super good, although it wasnt scary

OMG! this was such a good story! not very scary though. the first one was A LOT scarier. and bloody Mary can't get me! cause i don't have one of the villagers mirrors, and i am not a descendant of one! whoopee! but this is a great story to tell to scare my buddies! mwahhahahaahahahahahahhahaha!

Oh my gosh!I have got to print this!My class mates would shriek and scream!HAHA!I might pull a prank or two!!!!hahaha!!!!!!!

that was a awesome story.

this is awesome.

I read the bloody mary story and i heard it was a wife who was beaten to death by her drunken husband after accusing him of sleeping around with younger prettier girls( which was true)and now she attacks vain women and unfaithful men

wow it was a great story.

nice!!!

My bffs were sooo scard but they loved it!!!

l thought it was very emotional when the brothers where killed

it was not scary it was a sad and good story;[

that was cool you should make a third one

super scary it made me SCREAM!!!!!!!!!..........AHHHHH

that was cool and she was pretty smart to summon bloody mary to kill her stepmother

This story is great its a little scary but very good

I ♥ THIS STORY !!AWESOME!! ♥LOVE IT♥

wow the story was awesome loved it not scary but sad

This was a great story, but it wasnt scary.. but it was deffinetely creepy. The brother Charles reminds me of my crush, I would freaking die if he died in real life.

awsome

I LOVE THIS STORY!! ITS SCARYY!! LOVE IT! :D

Gerta was SO mean and poor Charles :(

But this story is so COOL!

I loved that story!!!! But it wasnt THAT scary

that was awesoome i wonder if it really works

I liked it.wasnt scary,but it was a happy ending

It was a good story.

love it..!

that was awesome ,liked it,the first one was pretty cool too scary :o

that was scaary :o

loved it

I LUV THIS STORIE MY PARENTS WOULD TELL ME THAT WHEN I WAS SMALL

scary i have seen her

OMG I JUST READ THIS AND I WAS PRINTING IT OUT AND WHEN IT TURNED ON I JUMOED LIKE 5 FEET IN THE AIR

omg this story kinda creeped me out seriosly

love it

And i thought i was scared of the first Bloody Mary story.

I LIKED THE STORY IT WAS GOOD AND SCARY

I tryed doing that with my cousin, but it didn't work.
But the story was AWSOME!

omg <3 I love it :)

ilovedit. Try reading the first one then thisss one. Really G00d! =D

I loved the story the next time i have a sleepover im sooo going to make them do that

that was an o.k. kind of story. it really wasn't that scary though. but it was a good try. that was the truth and i will not lie.

well-done 2 bloody merry

Loved it

Lol...... I luved this story but I don't believe it. But it defenitly caught my awesome attention.
XD
INAARA

I've done the thing of were you stand in front of a mirror and say bloody Mary three times but it's stupid

l iked this story but i didn't really get it though but neet story!!!!!!!!1<3

Weird story... But its awsome!

Wow.
I was speechless.
I really love how Bloody Mary ended Gerta's fate in total defenceless hate.
I got scared cuz I was like ALL into the story, my mom Texted me and my ringtone for texts is "Down With The Sickness".
I like your story.

good story

NIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIICE!!!!

Aaaaaaahhhhhhhh so scary why would someone do all that just for money that she was never gonna get !!!!!

OMG BEST STORY EVER
~PEACE KITTY XOXOXOXO

i liked it how the girl avenged her two brothers

sarah stinks

hey i think that was awsome that was great

This story was okay. Not very scary though.

i guess tonite im goin to be dreaming of pink bunnies,rainbows,colorful unicorns,and magical castles!!!!!!!!!!!!1HELP ME IM SOOOOOO SCARED....

Haha read it to my sis then she ran to the bathroom nd started cryin cuz she believes n tht stuff it was great nd thank gosh gertas dead haha.

its scary as well i dont no its been a week a go since i read this HOLY ****!!! i had nightmares like i was in A HIDING SPOT WATCHING this haPPEN to someone CREEPY!!

wow this is great;0

that was a messed up story but kinda odd

MMMMMM...... THE STORY WAS OK BLOODY MARY RETURNS...HAHAHA LOL LOL LOL

wow that story was good but not really scary.

i am bloody mary and i will haunt u forever...woooo.....sike jk

nicee

awesome

OMG that was the best blody mary story ive ever heard!!all the other ones are just the sme old thing! make more

Good over evil.....thanks to Bloody Mary.

its cool beacuse its fake

nice story!!

Great story scary at some parts... but veeery good

that story was freekin koolio!!!!!!!!!!!!! i had do do this for homewrk! ugh! but i actully thought it was kool! STEP MOM THING SO ORININAL THO!!!
-ashley

That was soooo good <3

OMG THAT WAS SO GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!SO BETTER THEN THE FIRST ONE!

Omg this was sooooo good!! I wonder if it's true

OMG AWWWSOME I LOVED WHEN GRETA GOT KILLED

THAT WAS SO COOL BUT ALSO CREEPY I DO BUT I DONT BELIEVE IN BLOODY MARY BUT IT WAS AWSOME ANYWAYS

it was good ... i actually liked it !!! :) :) :)

OMG I LOVED IT

Wat goes around comes around GERTA!

cool, but not so scary. I kinda like that combination!

the story was absolutely incredible! did it actually happen??? i loved it, any more coming soon?

hi i am soooo scared of bm i am soo scared like super!!1

hey, amazing storie! i finaly figured out why ppl make such a big deal bout her now! :) i cant belive that ur step mom drove ur brothers to do that, wow, thats really sad, im srry that that happend. she was a real bleeeep! cant say that word!

i love it

omg, this freaks me out... i actually chanted bloody mary 3 times in front of a mirror about a year ago. but i didnt have the candles and i spoke in english and didnt have the special mirror... im glad i didnt :O

awesome story!!!!!!!!!!it rocked but it wasnt that scary!!

this was so cool i love bloody mary if i ever see i would ask heer endless questions and i would ask her not to kill me or my family realitaves...
i wish i could see her and iwish my parents called me that

this was the best storie ever...i loved it but it got kinda boring

aaawesooooommmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

AWESOME!!!!O_O T_T it makes me want to cry that the brothers died. BUT GERTA DESERVED IT!!SHE WAS AN EVIL CHEATER!!

all i could say was "wow" it was a good story very well written

that was a good story lol

Sounded more like a fairytale than a scary story but it's good.

Good scared brother with it haha XD

that was very werid but i realllyy liked it

ok u guys my not beleve this but i am related to "bloody mary"

here is some info:
1) bloody mary is accually queen mary of scots
2) she was inprisond at many different castles
3) her cousin Queen Elizabath the 1st
4) Queen elizabath had her beheded
5) they fought over the thrown

they called her bloody mary because when she was beheded her blood was still spewing and it was very difficult to clean it up

there is one thing that is true in the story in a way before she was beheaded she wrote a leter that was to be read aut loud after the beheading
it said:

"What ever you shall call me after this thou shall say that name 3 times in front of a mirror and thou shall see me but thou shall be a relitive and it shall be dark with only little light i may talk or may not i may try to get who hurts you or who ackes like they want you dead"

i have done this and "bloody mary" has appered and we chated about peole who get on my nerves and she said "i'll see what i can do but do me a favor. . . . ."
there i was interupted by my mother who asked who i was talking to
i never seen "bloody mary" again but i hope this last time i try it i will speek to her :);)

AWESOME!!!!!

OMG I LOVED IT IT WAS SOOOOOOO COOL IM SCARED FOR SOME REASON

hehe better for gerta she is very selfish and a killer...

not bad at all, very much enjoyed!

loved this story...

That was good. : )

i loved it she had it coming

lolit was a good story but at the same time scary ehh ^_^

geezs!?! thats one scary step mom

really good LOL

cool

OMG!!!! i loved this story

dude! this freakin story is good, but not that scary. :( but screaming tunnel is real. its about three miles north of niagra falls, me and a friend went there last year and we had never heard this story until after we had went in the tunnel. my friend tried to light his ciggarette with a lighter and evrytime the flame showed there was a gasp of air then a scream and the flame would blow out.

omg this was a really good story. Please make another story. Your talented. It was very intresting. It's so sad when the aunty dies and the brothers die. I am happy that Greta dies WOOP WOOP WOOP! :P lol make another story, this is SUUUUPPPPPPEEERRRRRRBBBBBBB!
..

i loved it no bad things Im going to find a book about that.

This story is so freaken awesome!I feel really sorry for you. I know what it feels like.
I once tried the bloody mary thing. Me and my friends Alicia,Brenda,Sarina,and Lucie. We turned all the lights off and said her name 3 times in front of a mirror. We waited and nothing happened. Brenda said "lets just get out of here." And she tried to open the door but it was locked. Suddenly (now I'm not lying) Alicia started screaming and then sarina and i started screaming. We saw a white figure in the mirror that was holdin a rose and a nife. We were sure it was bloody mary cause none of us new what she looked like. All of a sudden, she lunged at Alicia and put scratches all over her face, then we all knocked out. Me and Lucie woke up to find Alicia with scratches all over her arms and legs and face. We saw Sarina covered in blood with a word cut into her arm that said BEWARWE. I'm not lying. Its all true. Sarina was knocked out and so was Alicia. But where was Brenda? We woke Alicia and Sarina up and they were really surprised and scared, especially Alicia who didn't want to do the Bloody Mary thing. They cleaned up and then we started looking for Brenda. We looked for her and finally found her in the (you won't believe it the laundry) with blood and scratches and a cut in her arm that said I WARNED YOU. We were really scared now and frightened. Alicia said for us to stay together incase something happened. It took a long time to wake Brenda up, when she did she looked at us like we were a bunch of monsters ready to eat her. After we cleaned her up she told us that after all of us knocked out she felt her self bieng dragged on a cold floor and after that she felt something cutting and scratching her but she didn't scream. I'm not lying. I have proof. She knocked out too and she had some lines on her arms like finger prints. And Alicia half way knocked out, felt something cold right thru her and she heard Brenda gasp. After that we never tried the Bloody Mary thing again. Thumbs up to your story! :-)

Wow that was.amazing

even better than the first!i L-O-V-E love it!pretty spooky if you ask me!

bloody mary always freaks me out i actualy cant stand her!!!

Awesome! Now Thats a good Story! Terrifying, Yet exciting

awesome

cool.but poor richard and charles .gerta was soo evil! not as much as bloody mary though!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I cried!!!!
Way to scary!!!!!!!

Really really creepy!
But that is what you want from a ghost story isn't it?

OMG awesome!!!

nice story:)

I love it!!! I always read this story

That was a good story and kinda scary

I love the story!!!

nice!! loved it :D

I LOVED IT WHEN YOU KILLED GERTA MARIE IS AN AWESOME GIRL!

I lovedd this storyy! <3

that was cool one of the scary stories ever XD love it

OmG! ah-mazing story chica!

that was cool
like first one better
i'm writing a bloody mary story and itz really different!

OMG I LOVED IT

thats one hell of a gosht story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

AWESOME! but kinda scary too! Great story. =)

omg good story i did bloody mary once and i ran out of the bath room and saw blood on the window it was sooooooooo weird

very nice story

this was a good story i liked it

niiiccce this isnt scary in written form but if i was there it would scare the daylights out of me!!!

it was so cool

Good story! I wonder wether this is true!

oooh sppooky!!!! :)

that was awesome i loved it how greta gets pulled into the mirror by bloody mary

O: omg,I love this!!
I would have done the same thing marie did,:3

OMG this was really good i liked this alot.... :))))) it wasnt as scary but it hadalot of evil in it..

This is a good story! I liked the part where Marie spoke the name of Bloody Mary in the native tongue of her ancestors three times.

Cool

good story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

omg! that story was amazing!!!! you should write more!! when you said "me" did you really mean you??

omg loved it so not scary

LUVD IT!!

this story was sooooo good i read it at my house on my computor i love it i love all the deatail it was so good who agrees???

I would have done the same and more

Not that scary, but still great story...

it is so scaryyyyyyyyyyyy the author of this story should keep on writting ghost story

That was a wicked story! Luv it!!!!!!!!!!!

It was very interesting but not scary . Still it was gold. :)

My stepdad was awesome, not all step parents are mean or evil. Cool story though.

I love the story, that was great! :) Nice work! :*

Great story, I loved it :3

omg that was real that was real. that would be a great story to tell my brother,nick!

Nice

Wow that gave me the chills lol

Haha not that scary but it is a awesome story

ummmmm kinda scary but im really freaked out about that story that someone named isabel aaaaaaaaaaaaa not gonna sleep tonight got a massive mirror in my room

That was simply amazing. Whoever wrote that got talent

nice story :) is it real???

its a great story

This story is more sad then scary.

I really love the story .. :))

omgggggggg very good story

this was a good story aND VERRY SACRYYYYYYYYY

that was a nice thing she did gerta diserved it [:

OMG!!! I love this story... even though it wasn't scary i still loved it! <3 They should make a book out of this!! Lol

OMGdude how did u think of this awesome spooky little tale

it was so scary but it was a good story i think she is not real.

this was a great story it wasnt scary how i though it would

i love this story not scary

wow, this was an awsome story!i love how they explained why bloody mary doesnt pop up when you call her =D .... its sad though that her brothers were killed :(

ahaha very nice story i love it i wonder if i can try to summon bloody maria ahah just kidding

this is a great storry...!!!:)

wow this was a really good story !
you did the right thing (:

OMG! i love the story! the stepmom i think deserved it! and now shes stuck with bloody mary for the rest of eternity! evry time i hav done it nothing had happend..

luved this

Not scary but a good story.. Stupid step mother deserved what she got.

funny

the story wasnt scary but its my favorite

very different and scary at the same time

that was so freaking awesome not so scary though but AWESOME!!!!

LOVED IT!!!
Not that scary though is that really how you can get bloody mary???

it was cool

LOVED IT!!!!!

Wow, just wow....

This Story was very entertaining but not so scary!!

kinda of long but the plot was chilling

it wasnt scary but still....i LOVED it!!!:)

that is way too creepy for my taste!!!!!! i loved it <3 (^^^)

wow is this story true

wow good storie :) real thriller. but to bad about her aunt and brothers :)

o.m.g awesome.now i am scared to look in a mirror.

She is a GIRL not a BOY. but really good story loved it alot!!

not bad nice atleast i knw wat 2 do w a step mom nw!

I think using the ghost to help her and ultimately kill her stepmother negated all scariness from the story in terms of it being a ghost story but I enjoyed the fact that the uncomfortable, scary element of the story came from her not being safe in her own home and I especially liked the fact that the threat of being hurt by another human is a very real danger even more so when you know the monster will always be there in your home and in plain sight.
In terms of it being a story of the supernatural I give it a 4/10.

That was the best bloodymary stories i`ve ever heard in my life!!!

Happy End!!!

wasnt scary

Great story! Just like the ones my grandmother used to tell me when I was a little girl. :-) Awful and wicked, but with a happy ending.

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